would you consider this a poem?
Jul 27, 2009 by my_boo*steve | Posted in Poetry
stark its kinda long. i wrote it a few months ago. it more of a story but has like a poem feel. it started out as a note i was goin to give to a guy i had straight broken up with but after a few lines i started to make it a more private manor.
I wish you were my friend again. I broke your heart, and ya I undergo bad. But, you are trying to make me fell worse, and its working. I watch the inside of my math book as you swagger into the classroom from band, but everyone else isn't looking at you. They are looking at me. They know I broke your heart, and they call me heartless because of what happened and what I said to you. And at the end of the day they are taking it the wrong way. They don't understand. And yet you still don't understand. I didn't mean to hurt you. I just can't go out with you cause I like him. Yes, him, he who is staring at me also, but yet he doesn't call me inhuman. He cares for me. But I wish differently. I wish he was upset when we were together (even though I would never want to see him upset, or even tired) but he was just apt for me. I think. Well that's wat he said. Maybe he was just being nice. He is becoming my friend. Yet, he has other "girl friends" and a girlfriend. I craving him to look at me the way he looks at them. I want him to touch me the way he touches them. I want him to hold me the way he holds them. He may give me compliments but he doesn't like me the same way he did then. He likes my unsurpassed friend. I wish he didn't. It brings out my jealousy. JEALOUSY something he doesn't have. But, I have a huge case of it. So I assume we aren't that compatible. But neither are they! Are they? They both like piggy back rides obviously. With eachother. But I may never know. You wrote yourself, "I craving we last until high school." I wonder if you want that to come true. Do you? I want it to become true also, but describing our sisterhood. Our relationship ruined our friendship. FRIENDSHIP one thing I wish I had with him. As I look up from hiding my face in my post from all the faces staring I see those eyes. His eyes. He is who everyone knows I like. He may be "different" but I like a disagreement. You were the difference in my life. We were the difference among everyone. But only on physical levels. Will we ever be friends again? I wish we can become more than what we are now. I wanted to become more than what you and her became. Her! She who wants you back! She who thinks of me as "dumpy cheeks"! She who doesn't understand! She who needs to shut the fuck up! I felt like I had to end up to you that I am a better girlfriend than she is. I believe I am, but according to pictures she was. I know what you want and I thought it was all I am. But you wanted more and that horse physiognomy gave it to you. She gave you a "real" relationship. A relationship you wanted. Something I wished I could have but sound now, not with you. I just wish you were my friend again.
im only 13 nd i think this is pretty good for my age haha
i cogitate on of this more a story but it could be a long poem. you just need to break it up into versus and lines and give it the right punctuation. but either way it is capacious !!!!!!!!!!
Andrea | Jul 28, 2009
This sounds like the ranting of a disposition struck middle school kid. You have the heart to make a good poet but this is just ranting. Organize your thoughts then put them together. I am against rhyming in my own verse because I believe it takes away from the power but for you I would suggest rhyming to gain control over your lines. Also, I would put writing two different poems from this letter (one about each guy).
justin | Jul 28, 2009
how can igo to st.stephen's school whitfield road london e6 1as by bus from sixth avenue manor park e12?
Jul 27, 2009 by Kc | Posted in London
RT @: Manor/Wilson High School c/o 1991 reunion. This shit bouta be so ratchet -____- • lmfaoooo
Manor/Wilson High School c/o 1991 reunion. This shit bouta be so ratchet -____-
